Comparison 2

In the third sentence we set up another comparison:

Satan had his companions, fellow devils, to admire and encourage him, but I am solitary and abhorred."

Again this is sentence is two clauses, but this time joined by a comma instead of a semicolon.

Clause 1

  • Surprising comparison: To keep things interesting, you want to try and escalate the comparison in some way. Try and think of someone or something that would normally be considered bad. It might help to imagine you were starting with the word 'even': "Even Satan had his companions..."
  • Good qualities: Describe how even this bad situation has some upsides.

Connection: , but

Clause 2

  • My situation: Shift focus back to yourself.
  • Bad qualities: Descibe how your situation is all downside.

Quote mark: This is the end of the dialogue, so close with a speech mark.

In prison the guards have to give you notice when they’re going to come in and inspect your room, but you turn my room upside down whenever you want."

When you swat a rando on the internet, at least their door gets kicked in by humans, but I’m getting probed by a bunch of four-fingered blob monsters."

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