Consequences

The next snippet shows the consequences of Jade Dragon's reaction to the insult.

As with the opening snippet, we can describe this snippet in terms of baseline facts (about the new normal of the drought), with a trigger and reaction thrown in at the end:

Of course, that meant despair for the people on earth. As the sun beat overhead and the rain never came, drought and famine spread over the land. Animals and trees withered and died and the people begged for rain, but Jade Dragon ignored them.

  • The snippet establishes a new baseline for the world: drought, famine, and dead animals and crops.
  • This triggers the people to ask for help, which Jade Dragon ignores.

The reason why we can say this snippet describes baseline facts is because Jade Dragon's behaviour is passive: she refuses to allow the rain.

This means the drought, famine, and death happen of their own accord.

But you could equally see her behaviour as active: she imposes the drought.

This would mean she actively imposes the drought, famine, and death on the land.

Is your main character passive or active in their revenge?

Think about the character in your variation: are they passive-aggressive like Jade Dragon (and Mr O'Malley) or are they actively aggressive?

Either is fine! The point of this section is to show the consequences of the main character's decision to take revenge.

Here's an example using similar elements:

Within weeks, the school was a mess. Toilets overflowed and carpeted the halls with strange wet lumps which seemed to crawl of their own volition. Rats took over the library and wolves took over the gym. The radiators turned themselves to maximum and ensweltered the classrooms until the paint sloughed from the walls. Staff and students begged for relief, but Mr O'Malley just ate pistachios in his office and left the shells on the floor for the roaches to use as helmets.

  • Just have fun writing the consequences of your main character's revenge.
  • Keep the focus on the world.
  • If the community asks for help, have the main character refuse.
Show the consequences of the main character's reaction. What is the "new normal"?