Twilight in the style of Dracula: Warm-ups

Before we rewrite the whole Twilight snippet, let's practice on just one small piece.

The street was lined on both sides by blank, doorless, windowless walls.

Twilight(2011)

The first thing you should think about is how do you make the environment more active? Consider this example rewrite.

Blank, doorless, windowless walls lined the street.

Try your own rewrite. Give the walls something to do.

The next thing to consider is word choice. You've hopefully spent a bit of time browsing through the thesaurus—although don't get carried away with wall to wall fancy words!—and you're ready to try and turn up the intensity in Twilight.

Here's a snippet and a rewrite.

Grim walls glowered over the street.

Try your own version. Give the walls some striking qualities, and a strong action.

Finally, the hardest part: expanding the action and description. For this you need your inspirational pictures and... your humble connectors.

That's right, the real secret to expanding the action is going to be how you use connectors like which, though, for, and as though. Here's an example.

A short while later, after crossing underneath the empty freeway, I quietly turned into a narrow alley which ran between two rows of warehouses. Soon the blank walls hemmed me in, and seemed to guide me like a rat down a drain. Towards an execution.

Go crazy. Turn this one original sentence into two or three sentences, and use connectors help you expand the detail.

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Twilight in the style of Dracula: Warm-ups