Describing the world indirectly—thinking, feeling, perceiving

When we report speech, we describe what one character says to another character.

When we report thought, we’re essentially describing what one character says to themselves.

Can you see both reported speech and thought in this snippet?

Some people say I will never return home but I believe firmly in my heart that I will.

Some people say I will never return home but I believe firmly in my heart that I will.

Some people say I will never return home but I believe firmly in my heart that I will.

Write your own "Some people say X but..." sentence. How many clauses do you end up with?

Do you notice how both the reported speech and reported thought segments of that snippet follow the same reporter-delivery-message structure?

Here’s another example:

He thought it was suspicious that so many of the haunted places were inns that needed some publicity and restaurants where the rugs smelled weird.

Write your own "He thought it was X that..." sentence. How many clauses do you end up with?

We can take the idea of reported speech a step further into describing the world through a character’s senses.

We only need to extend our definitions of ‘reporter’, ‘delivery’, and ‘message’ a little:

  • The ‘reporter’ is who is saying, thinking, feeling, or perceiving something.
  • The ‘delivery’ is how they are saying, thinking, feeling, or perceiving it.
  • The ‘message’ is what they are saying, thinking, feeling, or perceiving.

What do we get if we analyse an example of the 'reporter-delivery-message' pattern in terms of clause components (subject, verb group, object, modifier)?

  • He thought it was suspicious that so many of the haunted places were inns that needed some publicity and restaurants where the rugs smelled weird.

Pretty straightforward!

  • Reporter = Subject ("he")
  • Delivery = Verb group ("thought")
  • Message = Object ("it was suspicious...")
  • (And if there was any extra information, it would be a modifier—e.g. "After a nap, he thought it was suspicious...")

But there's something a bit weird about this analysis. Conceptually, the message is the most important part of the statement (because it is describing what is happening), but grammatically it's not the main clause; it's a supporting clause.

Let's look at another example.

  • She had told him not to leave the room.

Again, we have:

  • Reporter = Subject ("she")
  • Message = Object ("not to leave the room")
  • But the delivery has been broken up into a verb group ("had told") and another object ("him"—the person being told).

Using grammatical components to analyse this sentence breaks it up in a way that obscures an important similarity between the "she had told him..." example and the "he thought..." example—they are both describing the world through someone else's perspective.

Can you find the reporter-delivery-message structure in these snippets?

Bod heard Scarlett choking back a scream.

Then he saw that in the darkness of the burrow the stranger's ears were shining with a faint silver light.

Indirect description is useful for a couple of different effects.

It gives us access to a character’s internal world

In particular, how they perceive and interpret people and events.

This information is important to how we understand cause and effect in stories—in particular why characters do the things they do—and we have whole lessons just on this topic, like this one about goals and motivations.

It highlights the reliability of a statement

We tend to take narrator statements as straight fact:

  • Her sister stole the cookie.
  • My sister stole the cookie.

But when the narrator reports their perceptions, we as readers become aware of the potential reliability or unreliability of the statement: 

  • I saw my sister steal the cookie.
  • I heard that my sister stole the cookie.
  • Billie, who's a compulsive liar, said my sister stole the cookie.
  • I'm pretty sure my sister stole the cookie.

(The fancy term for this is “evidentiality”—literally ‘what evidence do we have that something is true’.)

Thinkingknow, believe, imagine, forget, remember, recollect, realise, decide, recall, hypothesise, understand, assume, recognise, infer

Feelingwish, fear, appreciate

Perceivingsee, hear, observe, notice, sense

Write a thinking/feeling/perceiving sentence that feels very reliable.
Write a thinking/feeling/perceiving sentence that doesn’t feel so reliable.