We tried this exercise with a few students, who each had their own way of retelling the snippet.
Example 1
The Native Americans didn’t talk to each other much, so when they found out what the Europeans were doing it was already too late, and the settlers and conquerors were already taking over their land.
Example 2
The natives weren’t communicating very well, and the Europeans took over all their land and placed settlements everywhere.
Example 3
The Europeans overtook the native tribes before they could spread the word about what was happening, then the Europeans conquered them and planted new settlements.
Discussion
Like our rewrite of the participatory mapping snippet, these re-written snippets use more verb groups and connectors, and the noun groups tend to be simpler and more concrete than in the original.
How did you go? How does your version compare to these and to the original snippet?