Revealing the Secret

This snippet begins with dialogue. We don’t see the secret directly.

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“Tell me what you see,” he crowed. “Tell me what is before your very eyes.”

The first character demands a reaction. Then they expand on the demand, which shows you how invested they are in the secret and the reaction to it.

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“Tell me what you see in there,” he whispered. “In the shadows at the back of the tank.”

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“Come over here,” my grandfather said, crooking a finger. “I want you to meet some friends of mine."

Write a line of dialogue, demanding a character to react to the secret.