Let’s start with using feelings to add extra meaning to a story.
Let’s use the expander again. Notice how adding a feeling helps you understand the situation a little more.
This is an Expansion exercise - please identity the expansions in this snippet.
One day, when we lifted it up, we found a dead mouse lying among our treasures. It was an exciting discovery.
Without the expansion, the first sentence is simply a fact within a recount. Adding a feeling starts to give you a sense of why Dahl has mentioned the rat at all. The rest of the story explains the reaction further.
This is a Highlighting exercise - please apply these tags to this snippet.
Here are some examples, using the same pattern as the snippet. Each of them start with a neutral statement and finish with a feeling that enriches the story.
We walked around the corner to find a moving truck outside of Mrs McKenzie’s house. We were overjoyed.
Mr Runcorn told me to sit outside of the principal’s office for the rest of the day. To be honest, I was relieved more than anything.
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