Let’s start with using feelings to add extra meaning to a story.
Let’s use the expander again. Notice how adding a feeling helps you understand the situation a little more.
This is an Expansion exercise - please identity the expansions in this snippet.
One day, when we lifted it up, we found a dead mouse lying among our treasures. It was an exciting discovery.
Without the expansion, the first sentence is simply a fact within a recount. Adding a feeling starts to give you a sense of why Dahl has mentioned the rat at all. The rest of the story explains the reaction further.
Here are some examples, using the same pattern as the snippet. Each of them start with a neutral statement and finish with a feeling that enriches the story.
We walked around the corner to find a moving truck outside of Mrs McKenzie’s house. We were overjoyed.
Mr Runcorn told me to sit outside of the principal’s office for the rest of the day. To be honest, I was relieved more than anything.
