First person in That Eye, the Sky 4: Increasing the tension

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Waiting for news

I can hear a car

The first snippet uses a handful of short sentences to create a sense of rushing, someone grasping for an answer.

Wait... wait on... I can hear a car. No, it was someone passing. Someone leaving the city.

That Eye, the SkyTim WintonSource
Breaking it down

Hey hey hey... who’s that… Someone is riding towards us. No, it’s an old man. Carrying groceries on his handlebars.

There! I hear a bridle clinking. Wait, it’s from behind the house. It’s only the horses nosing in the stable.

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