Writelike Charles Dickens: The fog in Bleak House

Writing our variation

Fog up the river, fog down the river

The second sentence is a more complicated, but if you look closely you'll see an elegant pattern:

Fog up the river, where it flows among green aits and meadows; fog down the river, where it rolls deified among the tiers of shipping and the waterside pollutions of a great (and dirty) city.

Bleak HouseCharles DickensSource
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For our sweat example, we're going to experiment with this snippet by using two poles at a much smaller scale: head to toe.

Sweat in hair, from where it drips onto eyebrows and noses; sweat on feet, where it soaks into socks and pools gooey in the bottom of rubbery airless shoes.

For our gator example we'll go bigger and use compass points:

Gators to the north, where they lurk in lonely wetlands and lakes; gators to the south, where they slop lazily around the crowded waterfronts and alongside the passenger-laden ferries of this popular tourist town.

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