We begin the description of the weather, starting with the first time period.
They began in May, even before the winter had started. Shrieking and raging out of the south, the Antarctic winds seemed to have lost themselves and come up howling in a frenzy to find the way.
Blimey. It sounds terrible already!
Remember though, when you write your snippet, your weather event needs to build. Don’t peak too early! Start big, but know that the next part needs to be bigger, and the next part bigger again.
As we mentioned in the first observing and describing lesson, you’ll notice that Colin Thiele loves to use a two word pattern to add flavour to his descriptions. It gives his story an almost fairytale feel.
Other examples you’ll see in this lesson sequence include:
Both are comparisons.
Here are some examples.
On the first of December the water turned off and the heat turned up, like someone had flicked a switch. Staring and glaring at the city, the blazing sun seemed take malicious pleasure in attacking anyone and anything that couldn’t go somewhere cooler for Christmas.
The rain began in November, well before school had finished for the year. Hissing and purring all day long, the rain sounded like a radio trying to find a station until eventually it became background static that everyone ignored.
