Dad’s ute is so small

The first snippet follows a pattern we've seen before: a quick detail to establish the scene.

Dad's ute is so small. I look inside.

That Eye, the Sky(1986)

All you need is a focus to set the scene (here it’s the ute), and a simple action as the narrator engages with the focus.

So small: Notice how Tim Winton chooses to say the ute is “so small”. Really, a ute is big; to say it’s so small is a subtle way to suggest it has been broken, defeated or killed. Is there a way you can amplify the emotional impact of the focus by using a judgment, adjective or simile?

Imani’s bike is in a ditch. I go closer.

Grandma’s cottage is open. I’m the first inside.

Write your variation here.

First person in That Eye, the Sky 6: The bad event

Dad’s ute is so small