Lesson overview

Detailed practice
Story - Narrative
Young adult and up
first person narrative
that eye the sky
tim winton
subjective commentary
point of view
pov
relationships
beliefs
characterisation
growing up
foreshadowing
coming of age
worldbuilding
present tense
judging
describing characters
metaphor
simile
expansion
dialogue
project
In this lesson we use the opening passage of That Eye, the Sky to explore how subjective commentary can turn simple action into a portrait of group relationships and personal beliefs. We rewrite the passage in small snippets, with worked examples that show the story transposed to a group of bike couriers in Nairobi and a revisionist telling of Little Red Riding Hood. There is a single checkpoint piece at the end in which students can either write a new version of the piece, or polish their writing from the lesson.