Expressive Punctuation: Contrasting sentence lengths

Long-short combos

Long description, short response

This next snippet also uses a long-short combination to create impact, but the effect is more subtle than the previous examples.

The wind whistled through the broken window on my side of the Plymouth. Dad lit a cigarette.

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The first sentence has lots of descriptive elements. The second sentence contains none.

The wind whistled through the broken window on my side of the Plymouth. Dad lit a cigarette.

The fire ran up the dusty curtains behind the yellow sofa. Anton tossed the matches.

A song played through tiny speakers that hung above the head of her bed. I picked up her journal.

The waves crashed onto the black rocks below the balcony of the restaurant. We waited for pizza.

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