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Let’s create a checkpoint piece. You can either revise and polish your work from this lesson (we’ve pasted it below) or you can write something new. (Your teacher may have a preference.)

Remember to:

come up with an interesting client
have your narrator describe their appearance in a judging way
have the client and detective introduce themselves
continue the narrator judgment during the conversation
finish with the detective inviting the client to discuss the job

He was in his midforties, I guessed. It was hard to say with someone that size. A short, dark stranger with brown eyes and a snub nose. He was wearing a three-piece suit, only the pieces all belonged to different suits like he’d gotten dressed in a hurry. His socks didn’t match either. A neat mustache crowned his upper lip and his black hair was slicked back with oil. A spotted bow tie and a flashy gold ring completed the picture. It was a weird picture.

“Do come in, Mr…” my brother began.

“Naples,” the dwarf, who already was in, said. His name might have come out of Italy, but he spoke with a South American accent. “Johnny Naples. You are Tim Diamond?”

“That’s me,” my brother lied. His real name was Herbert Timothy Simple, but he called himself Tim Diamond. He thought it suited his image. “And what can I do for you, Mr. Venice?”

The Falcon's Malteser(2004)

Here is your work from this lesson. You can either revise and polish it, or write something new. (Ask your teacher if they have a preference.)

ARCHIVED 220921 Detective comedy 2: Introducing the client

Checkpoint