Let’s create a checkpoint piece. You can either revise and polish your work from this lesson (we’ve pasted it below) or you can write something new. (Your teacher may have a preference.)
Remember, this snippet is about maintaining tension and being indirect. The characters know something bad has happened but they aren't talking about it. Instead they talk about banal logistics while their feelings leak out the sides.
Some other pointers:
- Use simile and metaphor
- Pay attention to the narrator's limited knowledge
- Link environmental details to emotions.