This snippet is typical of That Eye, the Sky: simple but complex.
The action is simple: a boy watches his dad get into a ute and drive away.
You could literally write, “I watched dad get in his ute and drive away” and you would have told exactly as much story as this snippet.
But the details are complex: this simple action is mixed with character and world-building detail: flowers on the dress, bum like an angry mob, a mean rooster, a house that’s away from town, obligations to Mr Cherry, beliefs about saying goodbye, beliefs about how routine and safe this trip will be.
And these details aren’t random; they’re chosen to create a subtle sense of foreboding, where the narrator feels the trip is safe but the reader fears it’s not.
In this lesson we’re going to set a similar scene.